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Good writing style. I found it very entertaining. I was hoping for a funny twist at the end and I think you could have made it a bit longer if you added him realizing that there was a flaw in the NASA man's story and him going back to investigate and finding out that there was a large vein of gold or oil or something of the sort but overall I liked it.
Thank you for the kind words and to everyone for the 'likes'. Possible parable found in the story? Here is a guy that has spent his whole life trying to get away from modern society/technology only to have it fall in on his head. No man (or person) is an island.
I would have hoped that he had more than a couple suitcases to move. It'd take more than that to move my self defense collection and I figure any farmer from texas' collection should put mine to shame! Nice start. Hope you keep going.
(Blush) Very high praise indeed from such an author as yourself - thank you. I have two different series books in work - one for the World of the Chernyi and one for the Roll Call series. If that isn't enough, if just accepted a position as the tech writer for a major outfit here locally. The little tale I posted was one of those things that come to you in the morning as you wake up and wonder...What if? I had some free time and wrote it up, posting it here... Think of this as a story from something like Grimm's Fairy Tales, albeit more modern. Perhaps more will come to me - short enough to work up on a weekend. Again, thanks to everyone for the kind feedback.
That's a nice little story, and an enjoyable writing style. I think you could easily grow it a bit if you wanted to. It's a great starting point for a novel.
Wonderful short story! ... inspiring me to post some of mine... Anyway, the only thing I would edit, is; "I'm from the government, and I'm here to help."