second half of Chapter One For some reason, I'm not allowed to post larger texts to the board. Once I get the squared away, I'll post more of the story....
Very nice. I truly enjoyed it. I like the plot and the twists that are in it as well as the "mysterious" parts. More please!
I like it very much .Are you going to continue with here or do something else .I really don't want get into something then find it's been scraped . You write very well and keep the reader with you ,you're not all over the place with back and forth to different times in the story . I like that and will tell others about your work .
Won't be scraped. Thank you for the kind words. These are the 2nd pass drafts for the story. I have several completed Chapters at this stage and will likely post one more full Chapter for this book. The book, working title "The Emperor's Marshall" is at the cooling jello stage - I posted here to get some feedback to ensure it was on track for readability, vocabulary and content. This will be part of a series as well. So - no, it won't be scrapped. It will be on Amazon first, with B&N and Sony shortly thereafter. It takes a bit to convert everything to different formats. All are e-books. I just finished Book 3 of the World of the Chernyi series and need to go back and grind off some rough spots - it should be out on Amazon at the first of the year. I have posted the first chapter of that book on the board. The first two are on Amazon now, all three will be released on B&N and Sony shortly after Book 3 hits Amazon. I would appreciate you telling your friends about the other work now out for sale - I am trying to make a living at this.... : ) I have another short (50K words) novella currently in work -aimed at the youth market. BTW - no vampires. Once again, thanks for the kind words.