Collapse by Richard Stephenson

Discussion in 'Survival Reading Room' started by txprep47, Apr 11, 2012.


  1. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    America is falling, ready to join the Roman Empire as a distant memory is the annals of history. The year is 2027. Tired and desperate, the American people are deep in the middle of The Second Great Depression. The Florida coastline is in ruins from the most powerful hurricane on record, a second just like it is bearing down on the state of Texas. For the first time in history, the Middle East has united as one and amassed the most formidable army the world has seen since the Third Reich. A hidden army of terrorists are on American soil. This is the story of three men. Howard Beck, the world’s richest man, also diagnosed with Asperger’s Syndrome. Richard Dupree, ex-Navy SEAL turned escaped convict. Maxwell Harris, a crippled, burnt out Chief of Police of a small Texas town. At first they must fight for their own survival against impossible odds. Finally, the three men must band together to save their beloved country from collapse.

    EDIT: An editor cleaned this up a lot from the original sneak peek. Its very polished and very good.

    Download the Sneak Peek for free at
    Code:
    http://rastephensonauthor.blogspot.com/p/the-first-seven-chapters-can-be.html
    Download the Full Release at Amazon
    Collapse (New America-Book One): Richard Stephenson, Susan Hughes, LLPix Photography: Amazon.com: Kindle Store


    Watch the trailer

    Code:
    http://bit.ly/Hl7o1M

     
  2. TheEconomist

    TheEconomist Creighton Bluejay Site Supporter+

    Lots of gramatical mistakes in the first chapter. Yikes...
     
  3. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    I didn't really notice. It's from an indie author, hopefully the final product will be given to an editor.

    The story looks exciting.
     
  4. DKR

    DKR Interesting ideas, interesting stories

    Even Indie authors can afford to use the grammar function on Word. Nothing against Indies, I do that my self, but if you can't bother to spell check or grammar check....
     
  5. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    Have you read it? Its not that bad, I've seen much worse. Its not so bad that it distracts from the story.

    What about the story? Isn't that what we are talking about?

    If we want to be grammar police, I will point out that "my self" should be "myself" in your post. LOL ;)
     
  6. ChrisNuttall

    ChrisNuttall Monkey+++

    Can't download it. The PDF, at least. If they're a publishing company, why can't they put it up properly on their own server?

    Chris
     
  7. TheEconomist

    TheEconomist Creighton Bluejay Site Supporter+

    Chris,

    My assumption is that there is no publishing company that has take the project on yet. I did read the first chapter that was available and there were enough mistakes to distract me from the story as well as a lack of diversity in verbage.

    Just my honest opinion...
     
  8. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    Chris,

    I downloaded it yesterday just fine, probably just technical issues. You can get it at Amazon and Barnes & Nobles. Reviews on Amazon are quite good and well deserved. Here's the direct link, hope this helps

    Code:
    https://rapidshare.com/files/3468611909/Collapse_Sneak_Peek.pdf
    I really enjoyed it, the story is fast paced and it sucks you in very quickly. I'm a voracious reader and whatever mistakes are there didn't slow me down at all. Cant wait for the full release this summer.
     
  9. Motomom34

    Motomom34 Moderator Moderator Site Supporter++

    I read the first 7 chapters and am waiting to read the whole book. Grammar and spelling mistakes happen, This book is self published therefore take off your English teacher hat & enjoy the story he is telling.

    The book has started with interesting characters in situations that could happen. The book is set in the future, who knows what the future holds but if this is it then people need to start learning a new way of life. I think this will be a novel that makes one stop and think. The author introduces some characters that made me so angry and disgusted but I guess those are types of people you may meet while in jail.
     
  10. DKR

    DKR Interesting ideas, interesting stories

    : ) Should have said "my own bad self".

    BTW - are you the author? If so, why not just say so? Folks here have been very welcoming and have made (via PM) some very good suggestions.

    I get a lot of hits to my series website from here - and folks have been kind enough to provide feedback - all to make my stories - more better - than before.

    As for the story part, in my limited experience in writing, I have found that a good number of people are put off by grammar and spelling issues - something most Indie authors tend to skimp on. The time paid to ensuring the "English" is correct will be returned with better sales.


    You can try posting over Bean Books - they don't charge and the feedback, while brutal, is worth its weight in gold. Grow some thick skin before you post, as the Barflys can be...intense in their comments.

    Have fun.
     
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  11. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    LOL. No, I am not the author. A friend of mine saw something about it on FB and told me about it. I went to the website mentioned in the first post and copied and pasted it here.


     
  12. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    I completely forgot about this book and recently read the full version. The author has an editor on board and the book is highly polished and looks great. Typos and grammar issues are gone! I updated my original post with current links. The book is doing very well on Amazon, its in the top 100 bestsellers list in a few categories, lots of five star reviews.

    This book is AMAZING! One of the best apocalyptic books I've ever read.
     
  13. R.Stephenson

    R.Stephenson Monkey

    Actually, I am the author. A fan contacted me on my blog with the link to this thread. I'm very grateful for the interest.

    Yes, I had serious editing issues at the start. I was so enthusiastic about getting the story out of my brain that I had a hard time slowing down and putting in any work on editing. I hired an editor and she did a fantastic job polishing up Collapse.

    Thanks for this post and the links. :)
     
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  14. Minuteman

    Minuteman Chaplain Moderator Founding Member

    Looks like another trip to the Kindle store! I just finished a book that the author brought to our attention here. Seems we are becoming the place to introduce survival fiction, awesome. Looking forward to reading your work. And I'll be sure and post a review on Amazon. Welcome to the monkey.
     
  15. R.Stephenson

    R.Stephenson Monkey

    I appreciate that very much. Reviews are the lifeblood of any indie author. I hope you enjoy it.
     
  16. luv2ride

    luv2ride Monkey+

    I am reading this now, almost done. Pretty good book!
     
  17. Pax Mentis

    Pax Mentis Philosopher King Site Supporter

    Looks good...just got it for the Kindle...it is next in the lineup for starting.
     
  18. txprep47

    txprep47 Monkey

    Wow! I never thought in a million years that the author himself would show up! Very cool! You got talent, dude! Thanks for showing up! When can we get the next book?
     
  19. Pax Mentis

    Pax Mentis Philosopher King Site Supporter

    Finished it a couple days ago and enjoyed it.

    CORRECTION: I just realized I had 2 books by the same (partial) title that I had recently gotten for my Kindle, the other being Collapse: You're On Your Own by Kay Mahoney...which is the one I just finished a couple days back.

    Starting Mr Stephenson's book now.
     
  20. Minuteman

    Minuteman Chaplain Moderator Founding Member

    I am about 3/4 of the way through. Very fluid writing, you definitely have a talent for storytelling. I am enjoying the book and hate to see it end. I also bought the short story "Spider" on Amazon. I read a review that was complaining about the different storylines. Personally I don't have a problem with that type of writing style at all. It is similar to Stephen King, he introduces and develops his characters separately and I always enjoy how he merges their storylines and ties them together. Looking forward to seeing how all these different characters come together in this story.
     
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