I like the idea, it's not new, but I like it... not sure about title...no, I am sure, I don't like it and think you could come up with something better... Of course at this point I have no idea "What is civilization'?" means... perhaps that is the real meat of the story as oppose to simply telling about nuclear war in late 40's early 50's which I think would struggle holding one's interest after a few bombings...
Thank you. I've posted another section. I was hoping for some additional feedback. That the subject would be popular here was never in doubt. The real question is - is the story line at least believable? Do the characters make sense ( so far). While it is early, are there any glaring plot holes? That sort of thing. Feedback more than welcome and I'll note I have quite the thick hide, criticism is welcome, if it contains detail. IOW - "Your story blows" will be ignored. However, "Your story blows because..." is both welcome and will begin a conversation..... Post comments in the PM section if anyone wishes to.. I'll respect that at well. Enjoy.
Uriah is not very likable. Not a bad premise for a story. Maybe needs a little more back story on him. The little amount provided wasn’t enough.
Uriah is a hard-ass for a reason - more is to come, but I'll share this now - "For Pete's sake, my name is Robert. My friends call me Bob." U Best to be a hard man before hard choices are needed.... Thank you for the comment.
New section posted upstream. Coming next - Chapter Four - Hurricane Lucy I'll stop here hoping for comments.
Enjoying it very much, real SHTF events as likely to be Yellowstone, EMP, changes in solar output, sinking of the gulf stream,as war or economic collapse. A real global pandemic could do it as well and the complete mismanagement of a minor outbreak could do it as well. The setting of the background is going very well and giving us some insight into the main players and also setting up some potential conflict points. Kind of at the broken down mine stage of the Jurassic Park movie, background, but a starting point. Loved the cuniform remark.
