The Woman in the Back of the Bus

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  1. RightHand

    RightHand Maslow's Contradiction Moderator Founding Member

    • Back of the Bus2.

    Had it not been for her slight smile, she would have seemed imperious in her ownership of the bench seat in the back of the 7th street bus.

    Her handsome countenance, testimony of her former beauty, was accented by the elegance of her pale gray slacks, pearlescent pink high necked sweater and paisley scarf in shades of charcoal and pink. Her flat heeled black shoes, while old, wore the buttery sheen of years of careful polishing. She was a woman who gave the appearance of control, both of herself and her surroundings, of knowing things that others did not, and one of holding herself slightly apart from the rest of the world.

    She was an enigma to the other daily passengers of the 7th Street transit. No one seemed to know where she came from or where she went since those who saw her board had long since left the bus by the time her journey came to an end. She was merely a curious presence among the ever rotating group of men in suits, women with children on their laps, janitorial workers, and teenagers with their boisterous enthusiasm. She gave all the regulars a slight nod as they took their seats but otherwise always seemed to be lost in her own thoughts.

    With only a few passengers remaining, she finally rose from her seat, stepped to the exit and regally descended the steps, turning left to begin her long walk down Almeda Avenue toward the corner of now and then.

    The six flights of stairs in the old building creaked as she climbed slowly but purposefully, her body erect and her hand, devoid of jewelry, on the old painted wood railing. Removing her key from the bag on her arm, she entered her room as if she were walking toward her throne on the dais that was the center of everyone’s attention. Taking her cup from it’s accustomed place on the hook on the wall, she prepared her tea with the water heated on the hot plate that stood on the board that served as her counter, and sat peacefully at the old Formica table that was the center of her home.
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  2. tacmotusn

    tacmotusn Mosquito Sailor

    [winkthumb][bestpost][applaud][applaud][applaud]Our RightHand hit another home run.
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  3. RightHand

    RightHand Maslow's Contradiction Moderator Founding Member

    Thanks you tac. This new one is my favorite (for the moment)
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  4. Dunerunner

    Dunerunner Brewery Monkey Moderator

    Pictorial in its presentation, I watched each word with anxious envy.

    IOW, I wish I could write like that!! [winkthumb]
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  5. Bug

    Bug Monkey+

    Wish I could write like that too but we all don't have that talent
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  6. RightHand

    RightHand Maslow's Contradiction Moderator Founding Member

    Note: Non-sequitar in response to a comment that was subsequently removed by the poster

    Having worked, for many years, as a sexual assault crisis counselor, I learned very early on that one person's crisis is never worse than another person's, merely different.
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  7. RightHand

    RightHand Maslow's Contradiction Moderator Founding Member

    I belong to a writer's group and we are participating in a course that requires a new piece written each day for 30 days. We are given a prompt/topic/direction and the twist that must be included. the goal is to stimulate our ability to create on demand. Then, we share and critique one another's work.

    Its a fun course and I'm getting a lot out of it. I happened to awaken early Sunday morning with this forming in my mind in response to the prompt to paint a picture. I'm not sure where I will take this or this woman whom I have named Milicent. Time will tell but it was picked up by a teacher's discussion group already.
  8. Yard Dart

    Yard Dart Vigilant Monkey Moderator

    Well done RH... thank you for sharing :)
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  9. RightHand

    RightHand Maslow's Contradiction Moderator Founding Member

    thanks YD. I'm glad you enjoyed it
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  10. madmax

    madmax Far right. Bipolar. Veteran. Don't push me.

    Wow. Good stuff.
  11. Sapper John

    Sapper John Analog Monkey in a Digital World

    Enjoyable reading! Thank you!
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  12. Bug

    Bug Monkey+

    What a gift...among others
  13. john316

    john316 Monkey+++

    RightHand Maslow's Contradiction Moderator Founding Member
    Great word picture, john
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  14. oldawg

    oldawg Monkey+++

    Missed this one first time around. Glad john316 got before my eyes this time.
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